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Tears Throughout the Years

November 2, 2018
By Anonymous

They laid on the grass; the fresh scent of freshly fallen leaves and pumpkin spice filled the air. They looked up at the purple-orange canvas dawning upon them with specks of white spaced out fairly on it. “I see a unicorn,” exclaimed the girl, “don’t you?” “No, I see a dragon in a top hat,” the boy said, smiling with his head facing the girl. They both laughed and laughed until their lungs hurt and started to cry. They turned back onto their backs and continued to imagine the endless images which the sparkling stars created.

They were waiting in a line; their graduation gowns on. Tears were on the edge of falling from their eyes. They stood behind one another on the grass, listening to the names being called through the loudspeaker. The girl was suddenly in tears shortly before her name was announced, one after another streaming down her face. A few seconds passed before the girl’s name was called and she walked up to the stage, smiling and wiping her face, trying to forget about the pain.

She was kneeling on the cold grass in front of a dark gray tombstone, in which the words “Rest in Peace” were engraved across the curved edge of the stone. The rain was pouring down hard on the ground. She sobbed and was in pain from the sight of her brother’s place on the field. She was drenched from head to toe and she felt numb, as though there was no purpose in her life. “I will never forget you,” she mumbled as thunder sounded. “Never.”


The author's comments:

In this piece, I tried to incorporate character development, repetition, connection between the different moments in the characters’ lives, and passage of time without explicitly stating it. For character development, I showed the different stages in characters’ lives. For repetition and connection, I showed how the characters’ tears meant/symbolized different things according to different moments in their lives. Finally, for passage of time, I explained the different moments in the characters’ lives throughout the years.


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Mr.Gr said...
on Nov. 13 2018 at 1:15 pm
Mr.Gr, Cupertino, California
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A twist in the end.