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Killer Eyes; part 3

September 28, 2009
By unwrittenlove DIAMOND, Mount Berry, Georgia
unwrittenlove DIAMOND, Mount Berry, Georgia
61 articles 11 photos 153 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, its yours forever. If it dosent, then it was never meant to be" -anonymous


I feel Alex’s hand clamp onto mine as she goes through chemo. I squeeze tighter and she looks up at me adoringly. I force a smile onto my face and watch her blue-violet eyes search mine.
“Are you okay?” she mouthed. I nodded tightly and turned away unable to watch anymore. She lets go of my hand and pushes me towards the door. I shake my head; I didn’t want to leave her. She nodded and pushed me again. I take one last look and push open the door into the hallway. Once there I start running. I pass by the nurses’ station, pause and go back.
“Tell Alex that I will be back tonight. Tell her I love her,” I panted. The nurse there nodded and smiled gently.
“She loves you too. She told me to tell you,” the nurse stated. I grinned really big and then left.
I couldn’t watch her anymore. Her frail body was getting thinner everyday and her beautiful brown hair fell out in bigger patches each passing hour. The only things that stayed the same were her brightly lit eyes when I walked in the room every afternoon after school.
I walked slowly to my car and hesitated at the door. I looked up; at the fourth floor, 10th window to the left, Alex stood watching me leave. Tears formed at the corners of her eyes; even I could see them. I waved and mouthed I love you to her. Her grin was even visible to me. She mouthed the words back just before I hopped in my car and drove off.
Later I sat on a swing at the playground, our playground, and wondered what would happen in the future. I thought about going off to college and having kids. Mostly I thought about Alex. The doctor told me it was a possibility that she could die within a few days. The cancer came back in her body at full force. It wouldn’t stop until it squeezed every drop of life out of her. I sighed, realizing that the sky was darkening. I had to go home.
My phone starting buzzing and I checked the caller ID. It was the hospital. Panicked, once again, I held the phone up to my ear.
“Hello?” I pause, waiting for her voice.
“They say I only have 18 hours,” the muffled voice cracked on the last word. I shook my head in disbelief.
“I’ll be right there,” I answered quietly and flipped my phone shut. I jumped into my car and turned the key. Nothing happened. I hit the steering wheel and turned the key again. This time, my car came to life and I sped down the highway towards the hospital.
Little did I know that another car would be speeding in the other direction. The driver was drunk and even though I slammed on the brakes, he didn’t. He ran into me head on and my head hit the steering wheel, hard. My eyes were in slits as I checked the damage. My car was totaled and I was lightheaded. My hand went up to stop my head from spinning, only to discover it came back wet and sticky with my blood. I noticed that my leg was severed and I was losing blood quickly. I closed my eyes as I heard the sound of sirens approaching. Voices floated around me but I trained in on one.
“He is going to die. There is no way we can save him,” one of the doctors from the hospital told the police. “Go ahead and get him out.” I heard buzzing around me and a tugging sensation on my arm. I didn’t think about that. I had to get to Alex. She was waiting for me.
“Alex,” I murmured. The doctor who spoke earlier leaned in closer to me.
“Mark?” her voice sounded oddly familiar. I turned and finally recognized her. She was the doctor from the hospital that helped me when Alex first collapsed. Her name was Dr. Cortez. She covered her mouth with her hand and let out a sob.
“I have to get to Alex,” I told her. She shook her head and sighed. “I have to.”
“Mark, you are going to die. You lost too much blood and your leg almost is detached from your body. You just can’t,” her voice broke and she turned away. I could see from the way her shoulders moved, she was crying. I closed my eyes again and tried to get away from this nightmare. God, don’t let me die. I have to be with Alex. Don’t let me die. I prayed silently as they hooked me up to a monitor. The beeping was as erratic as Alex’s had been. I squeezed my eyes shut trying to burn the image of her smiling face in my brain. Those beautiful dark blue-purple eyes. I couldn’t let those go. That’s when the beeping stopped.


The author's comments:
sequel to Killer Eyes; part 2. Alex's version will come later.

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on Oct. 24 2011 at 9:09 am
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
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Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :) <br /> <br /> Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing. <br /> <br /> If you cant annoy someone, there&#039;s no point in writing.<br /> <br /> Love is overrated, marry for money.

Sorry, I meant to say 'emotionaly' not emoyionaly.

on Oct. 24 2011 at 9:08 am
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :) <br /> <br /> Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing. <br /> <br /> If you cant annoy someone, there&#039;s no point in writing.<br /> <br /> Love is overrated, marry for money.

Oh my gosh, this is amazing! I am crying, no joke! You have such a way of pulling your readers in, and getting them emoyionaly attached to the story. This is really goooood!

on Jun. 14 2011 at 10:58 pm
bunbun74 SILVER, Fort Collins, Colorado
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again, incredible! i loved it. Such a bitter way for it to end but still very good

on Feb. 18 2011 at 1:41 pm
Spazzy_Kinz2013 BRONZE, Oceanside, California
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This is one of the most saddest stories I have ever read, but it was very well written. Very good job, I was on the verge of crying :'(

KellyR GOLD said...
on Nov. 18 2010 at 12:51 pm
KellyR GOLD, Richmond, Virginia
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We don&#039;t read and write poetry because it&#039;s cute. We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion. And medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits and necessary to sustain life. But poetry, beauty, romance, love, these are what we stay alive for.

I like how the plot is fast but I don't feel like I was cheated out of any part of the story! =)

on Oct. 15 2010 at 12:19 pm
_Rose_Red_ BRONZE, Many, Louisiana
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&quot;Sometimes the dreams that come true, are the dreams that you never even knew you had!&quot;

O MAN I'M GONNA CRY :,(

on Sep. 23 2010 at 3:19 pm
freewriter_123 SILVER, Miramar, Florida
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&quot;Whoever said nothing was impossible never tried slamming a revolving door.&quot; ;)

im going to cry! :'(

on May. 21 2010 at 7:41 am
MelissaHoll BRONZE, New City, New York
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This is so well written! I absolutely loved it! The ending is so heart-breaking, I was on the verge of tears! Well done!

on Apr. 22 2010 at 1:48 pm
LeeAnn1996 GOLD, Vernon, Alabama
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There&#039;s nothing to be afraid of if you face it first.

This was an amazing job. I love everty bit of it. I almost started to cry.

 


on Apr. 3 2010 at 1:10 pm
Green8a8 SILVER, NY, New York
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im the author of my life, unfortunately im writing in pen therefore i can&#039;t erase nothing about it.-by some crazy friend of mine

beautiful

this almost made me cry


on Jan. 2 2010 at 7:37 pm
BeautifulSimplicity BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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We keep it light, until it&#039;s time to go dark. Then we go pitch black.

I AM LOST FOR WORDS GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Nov. 17 2009 at 3:30 pm
Lost-In-Life GOLD, Whitby, Other
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It&#039;s never to late, if it weren&#039;t for the last minute many things would never get done!

All stories don't have happy endings in real life,fullforceaddicted. That is what makes this story so interesting. Anyway the girl was going to die soon. By the way unwritten~love this was amazing.

on Oct. 17 2009 at 11:23 am
SilverAngel SILVER, West Carollton, Ohio
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&quot;Life is an open book, we take the journey until the end.&quot; ~Me

Awesome! Can't wait!

on Oct. 14 2009 at 9:59 pm
MusicalXMolly SILVER, Shelby Twp, Michigan
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Live the life you love. Love the life you live.

This was amazing! Please don't let make die!!

JB!!! said...
on Oct. 13 2009 at 8:01 pm
Ohh i love this but ur characters are not well known by the readers..the story is rushing a bit...but that's wut makes the story ur story! thanx!!

on Oct. 13 2009 at 7:21 pm
unwrittenlove DIAMOND, Mount Berry, Georgia
61 articles 11 photos 153 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, its yours forever. If it dosent, then it was never meant to be&quot; -anonymous

no :) there is one more being proofed

on Oct. 13 2009 at 5:13 pm
SilverAngel SILVER, West Carollton, Ohio
8 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life is an open book, we take the journey until the end.&quot; ~Me

Awwww....Was that the end? :(

on Oct. 12 2009 at 8:37 pm
unwrittenlove DIAMOND, Mount Berry, Georgia
61 articles 11 photos 153 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, its yours forever. If it dosent, then it was never meant to be&quot; -anonymous

Thanks! I'm glad you liiked it!

on Oct. 12 2009 at 7:31 pm
SugarnSpice SILVER, Aurora, Colorado
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&quot;A woman&#039;s heart is a deep ocean of secrets.&quot;-Titanic

The stories are so amazing.

on Oct. 12 2009 at 4:57 pm
LeslieAnn BRONZE, Midvale, Utah
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\\\\\\\&quot;Dream as if you\\\\\\\&#039;ll live forever, Live as if you\\\\\\\&#039;ll die today\\\\\\\&quot; \\\\\\\&quot;Life is not about waiting for the storms to pass, its about learning to dance in the rain.\\\\\\\&quot;

I really like the story. The fact that you do it in sections keeps it interesting. I'd like to get to know the characters better, they are a bit underdeveloped.