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The Break Up Note

October 27, 2012
By Ellie McAdams GOLD, Billingham, Other
Ellie McAdams GOLD, Billingham, Other
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I clench at the cold stone wall behind me. This was it, this was the end. The wind teases my clothing as I wait to jump.
I hear yells coming from the town square below. I pull the note out of my pocket and read it once more.


I'm sorry that I can't say this to your face, but you are going nowhere and dragging me with you. One day you'll get off you treadmill and actually get from A to B, but I can't wait until then. I'm sorry.


Rage filled me up once more. I didn't understand what he was talking about with the treadmill. It was some stupid metaphor. I crumpled it up in my hand and began to step. The yelling got louder. My foot just dangled there. I slowly released my grip of the wall. The wind seemed to blow harder and my clothes began to flap around me. It felt like I was in my own mini tornado.
I suddenly felt a strange sensation. My eyes began to drift down and I saw the street below. I saw the crowd of people that had gathered to see my death, but my eyes had already locked onto one face.

It was him...

He was yelling up at me. He was crying. My face bust out into a smile and I reached for him with a hand. His name was on my lips.
Then I tripped. I fell. I could still see his face as I carried on falling. My scream echoed in my head as I fell into the blackness.



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on Jan. 28 2013 at 10:54 am
Ellie McAdams GOLD, Billingham, Other
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Aw thank you!

on Jan. 27 2013 at 3:06 pm
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist.&quot;<br /> - Oscar Wilde

Oh my gosh that was really sad! I like how you had a twist in the end. 

on Nov. 4 2012 at 11:47 am
Ellie McAdams GOLD, Billingham, Other
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awrrr thank you!

on Nov. 3 2012 at 8:48 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Never fear shadows. They simply mean there&#039;s a light shining somewhere nearby.&quot; - Unknown

You're a very talented writer! Your writing touches so many hearts, including mine, and is relatable to all ages.

on Nov. 2 2012 at 10:53 am
Ellie McAdams GOLD, Billingham, Other
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Thank you so much!

on Nov. 1 2012 at 4:07 pm
Snowflakes SILVER, Lichfield, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I&#039;m afraid so. You&#039;re entirely bonkers. But I&#039;ll tell you a secret. All the best people are. - Alice In Wonderland

I liked this a lot. I like how you show how people can react in times of desperation. It was really good to read, and from your other work, it's clear you're very talented :) 

on Oct. 31 2012 at 11:53 am
Ellie McAdams GOLD, Billingham, Other
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Thanks a lot!

on Oct. 31 2012 at 11:52 am
Ellie McAdams GOLD, Billingham, Other
13 articles 0 photos 29 comments
Thank you!

on Oct. 31 2012 at 10:22 am
Music-Maniac1498 BRONZE, Spencerville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
If Love isn&#039;t a game then why are their so many players?

This almost made me cry! I love it

on Oct. 31 2012 at 8:12 am
Stella_Val_Illicia GOLD, Salt Lake City, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;In the beginning, the universe was created. This has made a lot of people angry and been widely regarded as a bad idea.&quot;<br /> --Douglas Adams

This is good. You could maybe clarify where she is a little bit better, but I like how you never gave a straight out location, and never stated, "I am at the top of a building."