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love & poison

March 30, 2013
By romanticpoet GOLD, Dhaka, Other
romanticpoet GOLD, Dhaka, Other
16 articles 2 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
love is like a rose, it has many colors & sights of beauty in spite of having thorns


When you are disappearing in love
People can't see you, you can see love around you
You feel strange, but want to feel more
After some moments you get exhausted,
Maybe because your lover didn’t disappear with You
you haul & shriek but yet there are no symptoms of her presence
You act like crazy ‘’where are you” you repeat
Still no feedback of sound in this scene
Just the sound of your scream , you try to escape from this scene
The time when you're leaving ,
You prayed to stay one more time in this scene,





With your lady lover
Then it’s the real life you started to face,
You search your lady lover, the answer is pissed
You haul & shark again but 1st time in reality
You can't find your lover, there is no opinion to live
A bottle of poison I started to drink,
Then you see a beautiful woman screamed after what you did
you recognized she was your love,
you couldn’t touch her as you fell in deep sleep


The author's comments:
i had a different feeling while writing it

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on Apr. 19 2013 at 1:49 am
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You&#039;re on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who&#039;ll decide where to go...&rdquo; <br /> ― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You&#039;ll Go!

There is a lot of passion in this one. You create the image in the reader's mind of this emotion, and I felt it. Images are going to be your best friend in poetry- creating a visual that protrays an emotion will stick with the reader and impact them. You've started doing that with this, so harness it and use it to your advantage. :)

Mella PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 8 2013 at 3:16 pm
Mella PLATINUM, Natchitoches, Louisiana
22 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; All the World&#039;s A stage, and all the men and women merely players.&quot; - Shakespeare&#039;s &quot;All the Worlds A Stage&quot; poem.

haha ironic. A future Shakespeare you'll become then, eh? :P aha :)

on Apr. 8 2013 at 1:45 am
romanticpoet GOLD, Dhaka, Other
16 articles 2 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
love is like a rose, it has many colors &amp; sights of beauty in spite of having thorns

u know one of my friends told me the same thing, the interesting part is that i haven't read "romeo & juliet' & also didn't see the movie

Mella PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 7 2013 at 10:06 pm
Mella PLATINUM, Natchitoches, Louisiana
22 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; All the World&#039;s A stage, and all the men and women merely players.&quot; - Shakespeare&#039;s &quot;All the Worlds A Stage&quot; poem.

This is similiar to Romeo and Juliet :) I love it for tht because i lovee R&J <3 Niceee keep it up ^.^

on Apr. 7 2013 at 11:11 am
romanticpoet GOLD, Dhaka, Other
16 articles 2 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
love is like a rose, it has many colors &amp; sights of beauty in spite of having thorns

thanx for ur true response

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Apr. 7 2013 at 11:08 am
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.&quot;<br /> Henry David Thoreau<br /> <br /> &quot;I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once.&quot;<br /> John Green

awesome! loved the word flow and concept. Keep writing!

on Apr. 6 2013 at 11:31 am
EbonyandIvory PLATINUM, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Happiness is only a theory.<br /> Fate is my only enemy.

this is amazing