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Ruined Vacation

September 7, 2023
By Eb0360227 BRONZE, Houston, Texas
Eb0360227 BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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 It was a quiet and solemn night at 10:30 pm in the happy month of December. Everybody was home as the moon rises and says goodnight to all the dreamers, except for a detective who’s vacation was cut short due to a crime, the detective was driving his car straight to the crime scene looking nefarious, detective Edward Rodrigues got out of his car limping and holding his arm from an injury that had happened 10 minutes before he was called to the crime scene, he arrived to the place where it happened, one of the officers came close to him and said “ The crime scene is at the third floor, in the room 303”, as Edward went up the stairs of the building, chimere thoughts came running to his brain, imagining things that could had happened to the victim. He entered the room quietly, the apartment looked small but organized, the detective looked for any type of evidence in the living room but it was pretty clean, until the detective got into the victims room, there, he found the cadaver of the victim laying in his sofa lifeless, Edward Seemed displeased, Something that all of the citizens know are about of all of the murders that have been happening each year due to asphyxiation, which seems to be the case in this murder. While Edward kept looking at the cadaver he kept looking at the victims knuckles, they were red which showed signs of resistance or fighting, suddenly, another figure entered the room it was Wilmer, Edward’s Co-worker and a detective, he entered the room and handed Edward a cup of coffee, he said “The investigations are getting nowhere”. Edward nodded and started talking about how this murder seemed more brutal and forced than the ones from last year. They both headed outside and waited for the forensic team to arrive and take the corpse for further inspection. After the forensic team arrived and everyone ended interrogating the neighbors they all went home, Edward and Wilmer started walking, “did you come here walking or driving?”, Said Wilmer, Edward responded “I came walking” said Edward, “You came walking limping like that/”, Than out of nowhere Edward Disappeared from Wilmer’s sight, Wilmer then started looking to see where Edward might have gone, out of nowhere a wild gust of wind came towards Wilmer, it felt like if a marathon had just past him. Wilmer closed his eyes for a split second due to the gust of wind, then out of nowhere someone hit him in the back of the head, it felt like a horse hit him in the back of the head. Wilmer then passed out from the sheer force of the impact .It was complete silence for what seemed like an eternity, darkness everywhere, everything was moving, Wilmer was in the trunk of a car. Duck tape in his mouth, hands tied up behind his back. The Wilmer was terrified and didn’t know what to do. He started screaming in a fit of distress and the car suddenly stopped, then the door of the passenger sit opened. And suddenly Wilmer heard a familiar voice “ Stay still and be quiet we’re almost there.” , he suddenly felt a shiver down his back, time passed and the culprit opened the door. Edward revealed himself out of the passenger seat, The atmosphere got heavy, Wilmer's vision got cloudy, he couldn't breath, not because of the duck tape but because he knew it was his last moments alive, Edward then pulled out a gun and said “You and the first victim sure ruined my vacation”. 


The author's comments:

I think I did a very decent job in this story (not the best but I tried) 


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