Hi, good job with this poem, it had real emotion. I think a lot of people will relate to this, especially because you used an original personal slant on your poem.

If there is any criticism to be made, it's the lack of advanced vocabulary and an eneven meter. There is meter in some lines, but not others, try to make it a bit more consistant. 

Other than that, it was very good, and I liked it.

Chess Pieces or The Last Day please! (Forum commenter) x

Wow, I very much enjoyed this! Very nice flow.

I like this:

"I know things will be all right
I can’t believe this all happened from just one fight"

Sooooo very, very true. It can all be dissolved in one fight. ha, well done. Very well done.

The meter seems somewhat disjointed at points. but this seems to be free verse, so that is not technically "wrong." My mai ncritique is the weak vocabulary and lack of complexity in the rhyming words.

Example: knew that things would get rough
But I didn’t know life would be so tough

There is no stark contrast between what defines rough and tough. There is no emphasis on how much harder reality is than expectation.

I knew that life would bring with it pain

But not this agony which has our friendship stained.

Here is a deeper contrast between pain and agony which more demonstrates the contrast between what the writer expects and what he/she experiences.

Anyway, use clearer, wider vocabulary to express your points in a more vibrant and noticeable way and your poem shall hold more interest.

The idea is sound and full of promise. Note that all I have stated is purely my opinion. This is YOUR work. Take or leave my advice as you see fit.

I have a couple favorite lines in this one:

'There is no more us, its only me'

and 'I Guess it's time to move on/And forget about this once upon'

Overall, I like this one. It has nice imagery, flows well, and is definitely easy to relate to. Good work. :)