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The Forge

February 27, 2011
By CharlesDickens SILVER, Georgetown, Texas
CharlesDickens SILVER, Georgetown, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I do not agree with what you have to say, but I&#039;ll defend to the death your right to say it.&quot;<br /> ~Voltaire


The forge once burned with a cheerful fire.
Hammers that beat to the sound of the lyre.
Then war came to the vale, the times were dire.
And under the hammers, a new type of fire.

A fire that burned and scorched, and blackened;
The hot metal screeching, an ancient red kraken.
The sullen blacksmith dares not to slacken,
For fear of the rustling shapes in the bracken.

A thick blood-red haze clouds up the room.
Thick chains being made; bright red in the gloom.
Which bind up the blacksmith, in a self-made tomb.
Who fills up the forge, with hammers’ dark boom.


The author's comments:
This is a short ballad about the changes from peace to war.
A forge during peaceful times, a forge making chains and weapons.
A metaphor for the heart.

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on Aug. 1 2011 at 9:45 am
CharlesDickens SILVER, Georgetown, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I do not agree with what you have to say, but I&#039;ll defend to the death your right to say it.&quot;<br /> ~Voltaire

Thank you for commenting on this, I really appreciate your input.  ESPECIALLY your constructive criticism.  Too many people here think They'll offend everyone by saying something the slightest bit constructive.  I appreciate it.

on May. 17 2011 at 3:06 pm
MidnightWriter SILVER, Ontario, Other
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Writers are a less dangerous version of the career criminal. Everywhere they go, they see the potential for the perfect crime. The difference is that writers have better self control.

Somthing reads wrong with the third line. I think it's the second part of it, "the times were dire" It comes across as a little corny to me. Other than that I loved it. Once again, you've got beautiful imagery. I especially like the last stanza. It reads beautifully.