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Checked Into a Hospital

November 27, 2010
By MadisonReneeJane GOLD, Norman, Oklahoma
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MadisonReneeJane GOLD, Norman, Oklahoma
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The walls we build around us to keep out the sadness also keep out the joy. - Jim Rohn

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Checked into a hospital
Pale face, fluttering heart
I was gone when you needed me
But I’ll try to do better

Pale face, fluttering heart
You pull my hair, I pull yours
But I’ll try to do better
Even though you want to die

You pull my hair, I pull yours
And you still smile at me
Even though you want to die
My eyes black with guilt

Checked into a hospital
And you still smile at me
My eyes black with guilt
I was gone when you needed me.

© Luke S., Montclair, NJ

The author's comments:
It's a pantoum I wrote for my creative writing class.
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poetrydiva93 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 14 2010 at 6:25 pm
poetrydiva93 BRONZE, Ferguson, Missouri
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&quot;..Never let the fear of striking out..keep u from playing the game..&quot;

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This is super good!