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This is the start

September 1, 2011
By sunny.all.day. GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
sunny.all.day. GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day so I never have to live without you.&quot;<br /> &mdash; A.A. Milne (Winnie-the-Pooh)<br /> &quot;writing is a struggle against silence&quot; carlos fuentos<br /> You miss 100% of the shots you don&#039;t take.&quot;


We shook hands when we first met
Awkwardly formal
Smiling and talking
Just small talk
To pass the time
Since we were thrown together
In this bustling summer class

You stood up,
Let me sit where you were
Just a second ago
All the other chairs were taken,
But u just shrugged
And sat on the floor

Now when I think back
A flood of memories hit me

Our first date
In the town center library
Whispering and sharing
All the secrets we had

Our first fight
Silent treatment for a week
Anger on both sides
Until I gave in and apologized

Dozens more of both
Each unique
From the day at the book fair
To the night together
in a thunderstorm

but the most vivid
the freshest in my mind
is the first day of school
and the last of summer

Walking in to first period
And my face lights up
But you completely disregard me
And there’s another girl around your shoulder

Am I that forgettable?
That you quickly move on
And forget everything we shared?
Is that all I am?

Every though we’re through
As an “us”
I thought we were still friends
That this was just the start.



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on Dec. 22 2011 at 10:26 am
lucygirl26 GOLD, Greensboro, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life is like a bowl of spaghetti. Every once in a while, you get a meatball.&quot; - Sharon Creech

I really liked this one too :D It was very sweet and romantic, and typical for someone to feel that way after breaking up. I absolutely loved the ending. This poem felt so realistic because it happens all the time. Again, I loved the descriptions. No criticism!

on Nov. 7 2011 at 8:36 pm
sunny.all.day. GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day so I never have to live without you.&quot;<br /> &mdash; A.A. Milne (Winnie-the-Pooh)<br /> &quot;writing is a struggle against silence&quot; carlos fuentos<br /> You miss 100% of the shots you don&#039;t take.&quot;

Wow, thanks! Yea, I wasn't sure which words to capitalize in the title :/ and the "u" was force of habit, but thanks again for reading my stuff :) I'll get to yours soon.

.Izzy. BRONZE said...
on Nov. 7 2011 at 8:32 pm
.Izzy. BRONZE, Broadview Heights, Ohio
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Awww, how sad D: This poem was really cute, and I did not see that last part coming. This is very emotional and I can relate to the narrator too well. In the second stanza, I suggest you change "But u just shrugged" to "But YOU just shrugged". I also think that you should capitalize the title. Other than those small grammatical errors, this was a very good poem and you show a ton of potential in all of the poems I have read of yours. Keep writing!