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Cold- Winter

October 3, 2011
By JoyfulCheers SILVER, St. Croix Falls, Wisconsin
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JoyfulCheers SILVER, St. Croix Falls, Wisconsin
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smile at the world and it will smile back

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The trees are whistling
The breeze is old
Fingers are numbing
As my heart is warm
Clear crystal droplets hitting the ground
Shattering into pieces
Making no sound
While white winter snow flacks frosting the trees
Forming a blanket
Trapping the heat

My nose as red as a cherry
Cold as a cube
Sneezing so violently
Going ah ah chew

I shivered and shake
Fighting the breeze
But nothing could work
Cause it was only below 34 degrees

© Steve S.,Marblehead, MA

The author's comments:
I just came up with this for homework in language arts. It reminded me of winter and how cold it gets
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so_joy SILVER said...
on Nov. 14 2012 at 5:30 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
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Great job! I enjoyed the figurative language, and it was very well-written. You are very talented. Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! It would mean a lot.
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 31 2012 at 10:05 am
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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&quot;This gun has stopped time in its tracks, has altered the course of our fate. Destiny is shattered and timeless. Closed eyes feel the cold winds embrace.&quot;<br /> -Avenged Sevenfold

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Intereting take on a poem. As always, the imagery is good, and I also like the use of other poetic devices, like the alliteration in the line "While white winter snow flakes". Good job, Erin :)
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 31 2012 at 10:05 am
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
52 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;This gun has stopped time in its tracks, has altered the course of our fate. Destiny is shattered and timeless. Closed eyes feel the cold winds embrace.&quot;<br /> -Avenged Sevenfold

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Intereting take on a poem. As always, the imagery is good, and I also like the use of other poetic devices, like the alliteration in the line "While white winter snow flakes". Good job, Erin :)
marissadele PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 5 2012 at 4:31 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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I'm giving feedback! :D I like this poem, just reading it made me feel everything about winter. All the imagery and similes and author's craft you used made it sound so pretty....5/5 =)
Erin M. said...
on Oct. 15 2011 at 11:18 am
lol there is some typo and spelling mistakes, i typed this kinda fast, i would love for some people to comment and give feed back, if you do then thx