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Collision of Destruction/Collision of Fate.

November 29, 2011
By sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
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&quot;Afterall, a loose screw doesn&#039;t want to need, and a hammer doesn&#039;t want to be needed.&quot; -Me<br /> <br /> &quot;Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely.&quot; -Me

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Two minds alternate into one.
This decison was initiated by both souls.
I thought this was what I wanted.
I thought this was the life of praise and recognition.
The typical brain is now thinking for multiple.
Two minds rapidly drift apart.
This decision was prompted by one single act of inconsideration.
This was never what I wanted.
The typical brain is once more thinking for one.
The original decison is shifting out of place.
The two minds are presumed to be further and further apart,
with each passing day.
This is the treacherous collision of destruction.
This is the collision of fate.

© Steve S., Marblehead, MA

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sunshine7223 SILVER said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:44 pm
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Afterall, a loose screw doesn&#039;t want to need, and a hammer doesn&#039;t want to be needed.&quot; -Me<br /> <br /> &quot;Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely.&quot; -Me

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Thank you! I actually agree with you now that I think about it! Thank you bunches! I can see where your coming from completely. Thank you for the advice. :)
Donahue8 BRONZE said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:40 pm
Donahue8 BRONZE, Lansdale, Pennsylvania
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a little a obscure, but very cleaver. I love the wording.
tiptop said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:27 pm
tiptop, --, Other
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maybe destructions instead of destruction? i dont know
tiptop said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 6:26 pm
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i really like this one, and by all means take my suggestion with a grain of salt, but I feel like the last two lines could be more effective as one, like "...collision of fated destruction."  I feel like destruction is a more powerful word to end on...it resonates really nicely in the mind after

 

Plain-Jane ELITE said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 5:03 pm
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very nice! it made me think and i love poems that make me think