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My Greatest Enemy

February 17, 2012
By Abbeth SILVER, Snohomish, Washington
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Enemy of face
Hear me

You lurk forever in my shadow
And the depths of my eyes

I float only on the surface
Too afraid of the dive
The underneath belongs to you

Disguised with so many layers
But your teeth shred them away

I used to struggle against you
I lost to sinister tricks
My soul tightly chained to you

The fear in me is you
You are an unbeatable monster

I wallow when my will weakens
You, creature, control me
Secret sabotage of my soul

I say it’s ok, I’m perfectly fine
Just don’t look too close

You have ruined me with dark of ways
Stolen from me sound of mind
Captured my choice of life

Face of enemy
Is mine

© Heather W., No., Brunswick, NJ

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my cousin was telling me how she was scared of some part of herself so that's what inspired me
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ClaudeTheDemonButler BRONZE said...
on Feb. 29 2012 at 5:04 pm
ClaudeTheDemonButler BRONZE, Poca, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Even in the dark i see the light

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Its a very beautifuly written peice. I love it
Abbeth SILVER said...
on Feb. 25 2012 at 6:21 pm
Abbeth SILVER, Snohomish, Washington
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thank you!
Vanilla4Life BRONZE said...
on Feb. 25 2012 at 5:41 pm
Vanilla4Life BRONZE, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Never give up on something you can&#039;t go a day without thinking about it.&quot;<br /> &quot;Being happy doesn&#039;t mean everything is perfect. It means you&#039;ve decided to see beyond the imperfections.&quot;

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I like this! It flows and it demonstrates how I feel about myself sometimes.
Abbeth SILVER said...
on Feb. 25 2012 at 2:57 pm
Abbeth SILVER, Snohomish, Washington
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thank you!
LuxRawrs37 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 25 2012 at 12:38 pm
LuxRawrs37 BRONZE, Acworth, Georgia
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This is really interesting
Abbeth SILVER said...
on Feb. 25 2012 at 12:04 pm
Abbeth SILVER, Snohomish, Washington
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thanks for the suggestion! i'll work on that
Abbeth SILVER said...
on Feb. 25 2012 at 12:03 pm
Abbeth SILVER, Snohomish, Washington
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thank you so much!
Swims.M.V. GOLD said...
on Feb. 24 2012 at 8:01 pm
Swims.M.V. GOLD, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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I really liked how you used that our enemy is ourself. This was well done :D
CosmicLove GOLD said...
on Feb. 24 2012 at 7:41 pm
CosmicLove GOLD, Lincoln, Illinois
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I really like your wording choice and the way it flows together. It comes off really strongly, so good job. The only part that seemed a little off were the last two lines "Face of Enemy - is Mine" A "the" either before face or after of might help it flow together a litte better.

Other than that it's great

anon12345 said...
on Feb. 23 2012 at 10:39 pm
anon12345, Gys Drive, California
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I like how the "enemy" could be anything or anyone- this poem leaves a lot of room for imagination