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Eating Away this Love

April 14, 2012
By RandomPoet SILVER, Apopka, Florida
RandomPoet SILVER, Apopka, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life is like a box of chocolates you never know what your gonna get&quot;Forrest Gump<br /> &quot;Never say goodbye, because goodbye means going away and going away means for getting&quot;Peterpan


You see the cheese cracker in your hand before its consumed. Each bite i take its for you. The hurt knowing you and i will never be the same i cant contain so i try to eat it away. Each bite and chew is the love i once had for you but as i eat away the feelings for you are the same. I eat and eat and gain and gain but each time my heart continues to aches. So explain to me what am i going to do. Sooner or later my heart going to burst with all these feeling i have for you??


The author's comments:
I wrote this while i was eating and it just came to me hope you enjoy.

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on Jan. 19 2013 at 6:51 pm
RandomPoet SILVER, Apopka, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life is like a box of chocolates you never know what your gonna get&quot;Forrest Gump<br /> &quot;Never say goodbye, because goodbye means going away and going away means for getting&quot;Peterpan

Thank you this is one of my favorites as well. I just happen to be eating cheese crakers wishing that my crush would notice me when i came up with it. I got over him luckly. But im not going to lie im glad i crushed on this guy most of my best work came out it :)

lissa_ GOLD said...
on Jan. 19 2013 at 3:03 pm
lissa_ GOLD, Salt Lake City, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you don&#039;t stand for something you&#039;ll fall for anything.&quot;- Suckerpunch<br /> &quot;The purpose of life is to be a better version of yourself.&quot;- Lucy Hale

This is by far my favorite poems of yours! It has a really nice pattern and rythm. It flows really well!  You should definately write more poems like this one. --indiewriter

on Jan. 16 2013 at 9:20 pm
RandomPoet SILVER, Apopka, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life is like a box of chocolates you never know what your gonna get&quot;Forrest Gump<br /> &quot;Never say goodbye, because goodbye means going away and going away means for getting&quot;Peterpan

Thank you. Espically for the advice about the commas and the is. But when i wrote it at the time i was wasnt thinking is i was thing going so after reading it and adding the is it made more sense. :)

XweienX said...
on Jan. 16 2013 at 3:40 am
XweienX, Shah Alam, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Be inspired to be an inspiration.

Great meaning overall. What I would suggest is adding commas where needed or split the poem into lines.
Eg.
Each bite and chew
is the love i once had for you,
but as i eat away,
the feelings for you are same.

Also, i think there is a grammar mistake in the last sentence, "Sooner or later my heart (is) going to burst..."

Still, great job on the poem! :)

on Dec. 12 2012 at 10:14 am
RandomPoet SILVER, Apopka, Florida
9 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life is like a box of chocolates you never know what your gonna get&quot;Forrest Gump<br /> &quot;Never say goodbye, because goodbye means going away and going away means for getting&quot;Peterpan

Thank you :)

on Jul. 7 2012 at 8:23 pm
Your writing is really good, you should keep writing :D