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May 13, 2012
By EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
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&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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I could write you a thousand lovely things
On the soft whiteness in front of me.
Promises of eternity
Abound in empty paper.
They stare with bright black eyes,
Heads peaking around
The page's edge,
Watching me
As I
Dream.

© Nicholas K., Weldon Spring, MO

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EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 15 2013 at 10:09 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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Thanks for giving me so much feedback! :DDD This is the first (and only) time I wrote in this form, so it was a bit of an experiment to say the least. :) The link was meant to be the line "Promisses of eternity", which is both the things I could write and the "creatures" staring at me from around the corner. Though to be honest, I was mostly taking the phrases I could and running with them, which tends to create something as close to "pass or fail" poetry as you're gonna get. Me being all googly over my new relationship, this actually started out as a love poem for the person I was dating. I pulled a blank slate and decided to see where that took me.
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Jan. 15 2013 at 10:03 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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Thank you :D
nmk1128 SILVER said...
on Jan. 13 2013 at 4:23 pm
nmk1128 SILVER, Fort Myers, Florida
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Really good visual with having the words "Heads peaking around" and "Watching me". I find it odd how you kind of deter from the begining of your poem to the end; you start off by romanticizing about the "lovely things" you could write, but then go on to describing the words - I assume - staring back at at you and "peaking around the page's edge" as you dream. The two things have no real link together in my mind, you know? I'm curious to your take on it.
Prisoner24601 SILVER said...
on Jan. 13 2013 at 9:40 am
Prisoner24601 SILVER, New Malden, Other
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I love this poem. You have a really special way of describing that makes the message of your poem easy to understand. The use of syllables is very imaginative :)
MidnightSeeker SILVER said...
on Dec. 17 2012 at 9:25 pm
MidnightSeeker SILVER, Bountiful, Utah
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I quite agree! I love to end a poem on one syllable. :)
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 17 2012 at 3:59 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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Thanksies!
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 17 2012 at 3:58 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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Thank you for the feedback :)
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 17 2012 at 3:40 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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Thank you! :D It kind of reminds me of pouring words through a funnel. I like the way they rush out at the end.
MidnightSeeker SILVER said...
on Dec. 15 2012 at 3:09 pm
MidnightSeeker SILVER, Bountiful, Utah
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I really like the decreasing syllables at the end. I think it impacts the end and sound great. :)
MidnightSeeker SILVER said...
on Dec. 15 2012 at 3:07 pm
MidnightSeeker SILVER, Bountiful, Utah
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I enjoy the decreasing of syllables too. I think it impacts the end more. In my opinion, poetry doesn't have to sound like normal convers
MidnightSeeker SILVER said...
on Dec. 15 2012 at 3:04 pm
MidnightSeeker SILVER, Bountiful, Utah
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This is great. I really love the idea. :)
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 14 2012 at 7:50 pm
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
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I thought this poem was very interesting. I really like the thought that you put in to it. Some of your ideas were a little brief. I too love to play with formating. 
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 6 2012 at 6:10 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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Thanks for your feedback! I personaly like the last part, but of course, I'm an extremely biased author. XD
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 6 2012 at 6:09 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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Daww, thanks!
Lithium96 SILVER said...
on Dec. 5 2012 at 1:48 pm
Lithium96 SILVER, Stuart, Iowa
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I really liked this.  It's simple but something keeps me thinking about it.
Helena_Noel BRONZE said...
on Dec. 1 2012 at 2:27 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Well, yes..yes-ish.... I sorta like it. I like the rythem of the way it would sound if read normally, I like the sentiment and the thought; the reminder of all the posiblillities that a blank page allows. But honestly, meter and syllables are are supposed to be tools to accentuate and beautify the poem. If, after setting it into the form you desire the poem is LESS apealling rather than MORE, then either the added form is a mistake, or more work needs to be done. I loved the beginning (ruined only by TI's stubborn insistance that you must thread the first few lines through a space that may be call 'the eye of a needle') but the last three were made akward by their being forced into three, two and one syllables rather than flowing according to human speach.
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Nov. 28 2012 at 9:21 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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Thanks for the comment. :) I love finding interesting formats for poetry.
sakina GOLD said...
on Nov. 28 2012 at 4:47 am
sakina GOLD, Chennai, Other
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A negative thinker See&#039;s a difficulty in every opportunity but a positive thinker sees an opportunity in every difficulty. So always think positive and u&#039;ll surely B successful in LIFE.<br /> -Hazrat Ali (A.S)

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cool way of writing a  poem. nice
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 16 2012 at 8:39 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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Lines, not likes.
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 16 2012 at 8:24 pm
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND, Woodbine, Maryland
59 articles 24 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead; <br /> I lift my lids and all is born again.<br /> (I think I made you up inside my head).&quot;<br /> -Sylvia Plath

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Grr. The formatting made the likes all funky. There's one less syllable per line, if you can't tell.