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August 14, 2008
By Anonymous

I had finally gotten you
Out of my head.
I had finally forgotten
Those soulful black eyes
And soft lips.

With chapped hands,
I had stood proud,
Looking over the polished surface
Of my mind.

I had made sure
There was no speck,
No spot,
No clue that you
Were ever
Here
With me
In my paradise.

Blood, sweat, and tears
Cleaned that damned
Floor.

But it looks like
I missed a spot.

© Anonymous

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HollywoodHotshot BRONZE said...
on Oct. 23 2011 at 5:07 pm
HollywoodHotshot BRONZE, West Chester, Pennsylvania
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&quot;There is a fine line between fishing and standing at the shore like an idiot.&quot; -Steven Wright<br /> &quot;Even a genius can run into doors.&quot; -anonomys

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Wow, i can totaly relate to that! That was reLy amazing i loved the last part.
NatChick SILVER said...
on Jun. 13 2011 at 5:30 pm
NatChick SILVER, Muskegon, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Not everything that is faced can be changed. But nothing can be changed until it&#039;s faced.&quot;-James Baldwin

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This is really good. I liked how it tod a story:)
anonymouse222 said...
on Feb. 23 2011 at 1:28 pm
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this is amazing! it caught my attention in the title and first paragraph! and the end! I love it :) "I missed a spot." I relate with this so well...
silentvocal SILVER said...
on Feb. 2 2011 at 5:10 pm
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My favorite part is the last paragragh-I love that-i think its just enough to stick in the reader's head. It really gets you at the end-its like this sarcastic weight with the last liine-love it!
SKSK1214 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 10 2011 at 11:12 pm
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wow that really was something. Last cuplet gave me chills. Definitly have things to think about. Great job. Very relatable and insightful. Do keep writing.
emmacxoxo PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 3:16 pm
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this legit could have been written about my life...really good job(: look at some of my stuff if you have a chance
KiNABABE SILVER said...
on Sep. 23 2010 at 5:20 pm
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i love the metaphor in your poem ; it reminds me of a similar situation that i was once in.
Marlyre PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 1 2010 at 10:11 pm
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I wish you could've extended that metaphor more... get down to the grit of things, per say, but nice end line... read some of mine?
manda_the_random_poet PLATINUM said...
on May. 30 2010 at 11:08 pm
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amazing job love the poem..keep writing..it is very true for most people
one_of_a_kind_girl GOLD said...
on May. 9 2009 at 3:16 pm
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this is the kinda stuff i write- LOVE IT!
E.Lee GOLD said...
on Mar. 17 2009 at 12:50 pm
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this is really good:)
YouCanCallMeSarah said...
on Feb. 23 2009 at 11:37 pm
Very pretty (:
xjustlistenx said...
on Feb. 19 2009 at 10:13 pm
i went through the same thing keep writing ur waesome
SoccerGrl517 SILVER said...
on Feb. 15 2009 at 9:37 pm
SoccerGrl517 SILVER, Hillsboro, Missouri
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This is nice..I can relate to it and i like it alot.
Writer4life said...
on Feb. 10 2009 at 7:10 pm
This is so good. kEEP WRITING