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A Last Love Story

October 7, 2013
By chasing_fantasies_ GOLD, Easley, South Carolina
chasing_fantasies_ GOLD, Easley, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"In order to get something you've never had, you have to do something you've never done."


You hear music.
A soft melody, a lullaby.
You hear laughter.
A happy, joyous sound.
You hear a crash.
A sudden, frightening sound.
You hear screaming.
A panicked, surprised screech.
You hear gunfire.
A bloody, horrifying moment.
You hear silence.
A final, eerie feeling.

You see blur.
A teary, foggy vision.
You see red.
Bloody evidence.
You see concrete.
A close, final glance.
You see him.
His still, blank eyes.
You see her.
A killer, gun in hand.
You see black.
A sight of the end.

You feel moisture.
A warm, thick puddle.
You feel pain.
A hole in your lower chest.
You feel sorrow.
A loss of love and hope for him.
You feel betrayal.
A loss of trust in her.
You feel tired.
A slipping, releasing act.
You feel nothing.
A last surrender.

With those last moments,
You hear music.
You see laughter.
You feel happy.


The author's comments:
This piece doesn't necessarily relate to me in any way. It's more of a short story in sensory poem form.

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on Oct. 23 2013 at 10:24 am
chasing_fantasies_ GOLD, Easley, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"In order to get something you've never had, you have to do something you've never done."

:) Thank you!!

on Oct. 11 2013 at 3:32 pm
sadesdd DIAMOND, Elma, Iowa
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well sorry! it is good!

on Oct. 9 2013 at 12:21 pm
But_A_Speck GOLD, Wentzville, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"She keeps it all to herself" Alice in Wonderland

that was amazing! It created one of the most beautiful but saddest pictures I could imagine for this! Well done.

on Oct. 9 2013 at 10:30 am
AnnaFofana GOLD, Wausau, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
The point is we can&#039;t help who we fall in love with<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> - unknown

that is amazing. i started to cry :( its really good keep writing 

on Oct. 9 2013 at 10:27 am
chasing_fantasies_ GOLD, Easley, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;In order to get something you&#039;ve never had, you have to do something you&#039;ve never done.&quot;

I posted it three  days ago, thats why. :)

on Oct. 8 2013 at 8:20 pm
sadesdd DIAMOND, Elma, Iowa
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I have no idea why anybody is not commenting on this!!!  It is awesome!!!!! So many describing words I would not think of, also, I love the style of this poem! Awesome work you got here:)