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A Play On A Play On Words MAG

November 13, 2008
By Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
Andrewsaur BRONZE, La Porte, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Time brings all things to life, in that I trust it so.\\\\\\\" ~ Willie Stark

When the tides change
I’ll be free
to drown among my people
in the ancient lands of nowhere
nowhere you would go
with a head upon my hat
and feet upon my shoes
it’s time to go inside
to survive
the cold of the air conditioning
in my room it’s harsh living
with the lights turned off
no one makes a sound
except the pitter patter of my soul
across the aluminum roof of my mind
like raindrops in your eye
all you are is a blurred image
thoughts once clear
are now hard to see
I have to retrieve my telescope
just to see you
still leaves me empty inside
’cause I think it’s my fault
that I have no idea
but I don’t know what to think
or where to begin
so I just sit and wait
for the tide to come in.

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lostinbooks said...
on Mar. 16 2009 at 3:58 am
Beautiful. I think I often think like that, with similies. It really captures the feeling. A bit confusing on the first read, but after that, it is just and excellent work.

on Mar. 5 2009 at 7:29 pm
Sasha-Bear PLATINUM, Lockhart, Texas
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i really liked it! like the other people who posted i had to read it twice to make sure i understood it entirely, and when doing that i liked it even more. it really made me think about things going on in my life and the people around me. keep writing. its great.

AmnyR BRONZE said...
on Feb. 24 2009 at 12:50 am
AmnyR BRONZE, Clifton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
To the world, you may be just one person, but to one person, you may be the whole world. ~unknown

wow, i like it ALOT!!! great job

on Feb. 23 2009 at 12:10 am
yael krifcher BRONZE, Potomac, Maryland
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great job, you have to read this more than once its great keep writing!!!

on Feb. 19 2009 at 3:02 am
Noah Sawyer BRONZE, Saint Joseph, Michigan
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That's the kind of thing that gives me goosebumps. The good goosebumps, though. It makes me read it twice just to make sure my brain isn't rebelling and trying to trick me into thinking the words are something they shouldn't be.

smile101 said...
on Feb. 15 2009 at 7:27 pm
Wow. The title really fits that poem. Whem u r reading it, you don't know what to think. it was cool.

on Feb. 15 2009 at 7:25 pm
brittrow PLATINUM, Easley, South Carolina
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i agree with Mr. Happy, it is sort of confusing, but that is waht i like about it. it intriges me and leaves me wanting to know more.

Mr. Happy said...
on Feb. 13 2009 at 4:08 pm
that is... somewhat confusing. very deep, i think. good job!

on Feb. 11 2009 at 4:03 pm
Nice work, Andrew!

wolf333 said...
on Jan. 31 2009 at 7:39 pm
That was so cool!

smile101 said...
on Jan. 28 2009 at 2:45 am
Wow, this poem is so amazing! Keep it up!