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First love

August 27, 2014
By Mr-solo GOLD, Raleigh, North Carolina
Mr-solo GOLD, Raleigh, North Carolina
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First loves kiss doesnt leave untile your heart starts leaking
First the bodies numb with dull thoughts and slow breathing
First look into your eyes on the last day for my soul to start sinking
Thirst for the last gasp and hold it in untile your bleeding
Hold on with a firm grasp untile your palms your mind starts reading
So I cry into my hands because the devil wont look while my hearts beating
And if my tears had their own eyes they would close them and stop beleiving


The author's comments:
Things hurt sometimes I suppose

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Mr-solo GOLD said...
on Sep. 18 2014 at 10:01 am
Mr-solo GOLD, Raleigh, North Carolina
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But their never cheesy if they mean somthing to you

Mr-solo GOLD said...
on Sep. 18 2014 at 10:00 am
Mr-solo GOLD, Raleigh, North Carolina
17 articles 0 photos 11 comments
: ) yep, no worries if you look at some of my other poems you will see some cheesyness lol

on Sep. 17 2014 at 6:12 pm
dgeileen PLATINUM, Livingston, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;To live is the rarest thing in the world. Most people exist, that is all.&rdquo; <br /> ― Oscar Wilde

Thanks :) it's a lot more literal than yours though, I hope I can write meaningful pieces without making them cheesy

Mr-solo GOLD said...
on Sep. 17 2014 at 1:26 pm
Mr-solo GOLD, Raleigh, North Carolina
17 articles 0 photos 11 comments
I appreciate that, I read your poem about being mvp and I thought it was really cool.

on Sep. 6 2014 at 2:59 pm
dgeileen PLATINUM, Livingston, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;To live is the rarest thing in the world. Most people exist, that is all.&rdquo; <br /> ― Oscar Wilde

I love the rhyme and rhythm, yet it still manages to keep the love hurts theme.