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Love Sick

February 1, 2016
By Saturn. BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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Saturn. BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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&quot;The mind is better than the sword&quot;<br /> -Unknown (I&#039;m too lazy to look it up)<br /> &quot;All warfare is based on deception&quot;<br /> -Sun Tzu

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Alone at night, the room very dark,

The memories flooding my ever-so-fragile mind.

Without a shoulder to cry on, or a spirit to help me.

I hug my pillow. But it doesn't help me sleep, it places a longing,

A want, a need of love.

I had no one who cared for me, and consequently, no one to nurse my current ordeal.

A hug that screams for love, and a pillow that seems to absorb it, was all that is left in my melancholy state of mind

© Jessica P., Bethel Park, PA

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Think of it as a part two to Demons.

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Maculate_Dream DIAMOND said...
on Mar. 20 2016 at 2:04 pm
Maculate_Dream DIAMOND, Riverside, California
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I have not failed, I just found 10,000 ways to not succeed.<br /> <br /> All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream.

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A very poetic work indeed. Nice sentence structure and a good use of vocabulary. Very artistic.
caseyrebecca BRONZE said...
on Feb. 24 2016 at 2:48 pm
caseyrebecca BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
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This is pretty good! Maybe attempt some more figurative language and leave more open to the reader to interpret. It's pretty gripping! Keep it up!
CNBono17 SILVER said...
on Feb. 10 2016 at 8:42 am
CNBono17 SILVER, Rural, South Carolina
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Lego ergo sum (Latin&mdash;I read, therefore, I am)<br /> The pen is mightier than the sword&mdash;unknown<br /> Don&#039;t let anyone look down on you because you are young, but set an example for believers in speech, in conduct, in love, in faith, and in purity&mdash;1 Timothy 4:12

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I love this; it's gripping and compelling, and I'm hugging you through the computer.
writer-violist DIAMOND said...
on Feb. 7 2016 at 3:25 pm
writer-violist DIAMOND, Jenks, Oklahoma
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&ldquo;There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.&rdquo; <br /> ― Maya Angelou, I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings

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Wow! This poem is really good! I like the line spacing that you use because it really goes along with the mood and tone of the poem. I also like your use of energy so your readers can see the poem happening in their minds. Also, great word choice! This is great! Please keep writing and God bless! :)