Polychrome Moan | Teen Ink

Polychrome Moan MAG

December 29, 2011
By queer_fish SILVER, San Antonio, Texas
queer_fish SILVER, San Antonio, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 26 comments

Bold oil rainbow
In a sky of black asphalt
Strewn with pebble stars



Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 10 comments.


Blairezie GOLD said...
on Jan. 2 2012 at 6:55 pm
Blairezie GOLD, Montrose, Colorado
18 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You must never give in to despair. When there is no hope, you give yourself hope. That is the true meaning of inner strength." -General Iroh

This is cool. Such a different style from your other work, though!

floragj GOLD said...
on Jan. 2 2012 at 5:09 pm
floragj GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
19 articles 0 photos 8 comments
This is really gorgeous imagery. I also adore the title - it has a great ring to it. Great work.

on Jan. 2 2012 at 1:31 pm
queer_fish SILVER, San Antonio, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 26 comments
Thanks so much. You are too kind. Nice vocab. I love the word "exquisite" :)

on Jan. 2 2012 at 1:29 pm
queer_fish SILVER, San Antonio, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 26 comments
Thank you! The title just came to me... I'm not sure it makes sense. Thanks so much for the feedback alwaysfallingfurther! :)

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Jan. 1 2012 at 12:21 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
11 articles 0 photos 116 comments
I really love your haiku! The imagery is exquisite, and I especially love the last line.

on Dec. 31 2011 at 10:48 pm
alwaysfallingfurther, Shavano Park, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 11 comments
I love the title! really cool imagery. great work! :)

on Dec. 31 2011 at 6:42 pm
queer_fish SILVER, San Antonio, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 26 comments
Thank you!

on Dec. 31 2011 at 6:41 pm
queer_fish SILVER, San Antonio, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 26 comments
Thanks for your feedback! Yup, I wrote this one day after seeing an oil rainbow at the supermarket parking lot. :)

on Dec. 31 2011 at 4:06 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

Yeah I can picture myself looking at this sensation many times in a parking lot, wondering how it got to be that way~ Solid imagery.

on Dec. 31 2011 at 3:58 pm
Jumper008 SILVER, Exton, Pennsylvania
6 articles 0 photos 16 comments
I really like the imagery in this poem! Great job!