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You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.


The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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Chloenhearts said...
on Dec. 2 2012 at 7:16 pm
Im not sure if you turned this in for a grade in school, but your poem was amazing. And sad. lol. But your rhyme scheme was off and so was the lines in the paragraphs. Soo I kind of changed your poem a little and hopefully you wont care if I turn it in as a grade. So it goes: (line 1)I saw you today, but youre not as I remember. (line 2) Your eyes no longer smile (line 3) Youve changed since last september (Line 4) I would travel for that old you miles and miles. 2nd paragraph: (Line 1) In my life you were cherished. (line 2) But now our relationship has went cold (Line 3) Your personality has tarnished (Line 4) Now that your heart is no longer gold 3rd paragraph: (Line 1) You fell from my arms (line 2) Just like leaves in the fall (Line 3) Sound the alarms (Line 4) Because your not apart of me at all. Couplet: (Line 1) You saw me today, the memories the same. (Line 2) My eyes still burst with fire, my love forever tamed. Sorry for the change but I just figured it would be respectful to show you, maybe it would help. The rhyme scheme and pattern/set up is now fixed. Thanks!

CallMeAlex98 said...
on Nov. 8 2012 at 12:14 pm
CallMeAlex98, Phiadelphia, Pennsylvania
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"There are things that we don't want to happen but have to accept, things we don't want to know but have to learn, and people we can't live without but have to let go."

I feel the same way about my ex-bestfriend. 

Lea28 said...
on Nov. 2 2012 at 12:38 pm
This is so good. Keep it up !

on Nov. 1 2012 at 11:12 am
dotsonboy99 BRONZE, Baton Rouge, Louisiana
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
yolo

this was a very unique and well written.

on Oct. 26 2012 at 10:54 am
MyFinalDestiny GOLD, Central City, Pennsylvania
10 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"stay golden" the outsiders

when i recently started school this year i came back and my cousin who i love dearly who comes to my school has begun to dis life and i am afraid of losing her

on Oct. 2 2012 at 7:24 pm
TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD, Irvine, California
13 articles 1 photo 299 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn&#039;t measured by the number of breaths you take, but by the moments which take your breath away.<br /> <br /> You are only as strong as your weakest link.

aww :( I know what that feels like!

Misfit95 said...
on Sep. 28 2012 at 10:07 am
Misfit95, Dover, Ohio
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what a sad poem :/ i can relate to this

on Sep. 17 2012 at 9:24 pm
CelebrateDifferences, Long Island, New York
0 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;Gods of Olympus.&rdquo; Piper stared at Leo. &ldquo;What happened to you?&rdquo;<br /> His hair was greased back. He had welding goggles on his forehead, a lipstick mark on his cheek, tattoos all over his arms, and a T-shirt that read HOT STUFF, BAD BOY, and TEAM LEO.<br /> &ldquo;Long story,&rdquo; he said.&rdquo;

What a beautifully sad poem! This is similar to what happened to someone I thought i knew.... Keep up the great work!!

on Sep. 14 2012 at 6:55 pm
jaclynpee BRONZE, Bellevue, Ohio
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My ex best friend and i stopped talking about a year ago.  This poem reminds me of a few weeks ago i seen her walking, she looked so miserable.  

on Sep. 14 2012 at 6:55 pm
jaclynpee BRONZE, Bellevue, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 6 comments
My ex best friend and i stopped talking about a year ago.  This poem reminds me of a few weeks ago i seen her walking, she looked so miserable.  

on Sep. 3 2012 at 5:58 pm
DanceOfBlades PLATINUM, Springfield, Virginia
28 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Humankind cannot gain anything without first giving something in return. To obtain, something of equal value must be lost. That is alchemy&#039;s first Law of Equivalent Exchange.&quot;

I love how it's so simple and quiet. It gives the perfect feeling of the sadness we feel when someone close has changed and we're left alone.

on Aug. 8 2012 at 9:44 pm
Sweetie2toCute SILVER, Brookyln, New York
8 articles 0 photos 5 comments
i really like this poem because it reminds me alot of myself and how ppl feel bout me and how ived changed. but as people only see wats on the outside as to wat we feel on the inside.

NinaQ GOLD said...
on Aug. 7 2012 at 7:40 am
NinaQ GOLD, Seattle, Washington
15 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Pick your heart up off the floor<br /> Sometimes, there are things you can only do alone<br /> You can cry for now but just become stronger the next day

I favorited this 2 years ago, i come back upon this again and it is just as beautiful, this is something I truely need to keep me away from someone who's held me back for the new sophmore school year <3 please keep writing and share with us

on Jul. 21 2012 at 6:29 pm
missattitude BRONZE, San Antonio, Texas
2 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
DON&#039;T you dare rember me the moment i start forgetting you.

I thought i was the only one who this had happened to... but thanks nice to know that i'm NOT alone!

on Jul. 1 2012 at 6:11 pm
orangeslice SILVER, Midland, Michigan
8 articles 3 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;When once you have tasted flight, you will forever walk the earth with your eyes turned skyward, for there you have been, and there you will long to return.&quot;<br /> -Leonardo da Vinci<br /> <br /> &quot;Somewhere, something incredible is waiting to be known.&quot;<br /> -Carl Sagan

Wow, I love this. I had a friend like that, and it's nice to find something so relatable. Great work!

on Jun. 21 2012 at 2:20 pm
ALovelyGirl BRONZE, Dearborn Heights, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don&#039;t wish to be everything to everyone, but I would like to be something to someone. <br /> <br /> -Javan

I love how in the end you say you havent changed.

on Jun. 10 2012 at 11:05 am
msprincess SILVER, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
build a bridge and get over it

this poem is so decent! I like it the beginning part is so good I like the whole poem and how you reflect towards the end ..

Shey22 SILVER said...
on Jun. 6 2012 at 6:31 am
Shey22 SILVER, St. Marys, Georgia
6 articles 4 photos 4 comments
I can relate to this and love the fact that I'm not the only one. Thank you for sharing this with us :D

on Jun. 1 2012 at 8:50 pm
lookatdatsoul SILVER, Rio, Illinois
7 articles 1 photo 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
Forgive him, for he believes that the customs of his tribe are the laws of nature. ~George Bernard Shaw

This is a similar message to what I was trying to convey in my sonnet entitled "Then". 

AMAWHI said...
on May. 21 2012 at 10:37 am
This poem is so beautiful. You use good metaphors with a golden heart. You are definitely an amazing poem writer. Definitely keep writing.