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Forsaken

February 18, 2015
By RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison


Why do you talk in such a peaceful, calm manner?
You seem so serine, like life doesn`t matter
But don`t you know that God`s love was shed, the representation of the red banner?
Why do thou not talk when I ask of this weirdness?
Very meanly, redness, purplish-ash, fur
All of these voices in side my head are a blur
I said I`d give you hand
You feel I`m weak as thou lo`ly sand
Frankensince, gold, and myrr
These were the gifts that were laid before my Savior
“Your Savior? Sure.”
Viking, Patriot, Indian, or Free
I tell you to look, don`t tell me you can`t see
But I`m telling you now
You are free as can be
Now though doeth not what a forsaken soul would say
Because there are not a single one left of those in our day


The author's comments:

This is a poem about Jesus` forgiveness. I love Him, and He obviously loves me as He died for my sisns and rose again.


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RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 21 2015 at 3:47 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison

Thank you. I looked at it, but I am not sure what to say about breakdancing. I would love to comment on a poem of yours, though. Please send me a link to any that you might have.

HammadWaseem said...
on Feb. 21 2015 at 3:38 pm
HammadWaseem, Lahore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Be proud of who you are.<br /> -Eminem<br /> <br /> You can&#039;t see me<br /> -John Cena<br /> <br /> Ooh, somebody stop me!<br /> -Mask

thats amazing @RealRiter BTW will you comment and rate on my work? TeenInk.com/video/dancing/114206/The-Unbeatable-Breakdancer

RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 20 2015 at 3:24 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work.&quot; -Thomas Edison

Thank you so much! Please tell me if there is anything that I could change about it to make a better one next time.:)

GGauns said...
on Feb. 20 2015 at 8:36 am
GGauns, Ponda, Other
0 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
&#039;We cannot choose to get hurt in this world. But, we do have some say in choosing what can hurt us.&#039;

It's really nice..

RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 19 2015 at 5:58 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work.&quot; -Thomas Edison

Please do comment on my poem. I would really like some advice of how I could do better next time.