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April 3, 2010
By _NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
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_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

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There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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I shook my head and cocked it to the side. I groaned and pulled the covers over my head, only to make me feel trapped and sweaty. It was too quiet...

I lifted up my head from over the covers, and I sighed when I stared across my empty bedroom. The walls seemed to be an eerie blue, and my gasps came out in a hushed echo. It was only 9:00 pm. My parents were usually awake watching T.V or just listening to the radio, but this night was different. I could not hear ANYTHING.

Suddenly, I heard a voice that I did not recognize. The door was an inch open, but it was suddenly pushed full open, revealing a long silhouette that creeped on the bedroom door. I gasped and slowly slipped under the covers, trying to be unnoticable. Then, the blurry image seemed to crawl toward me, and I could finally see who this person was.

© Greg K., New Lenox, IL

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This is the intro to a story I am going to write. I just hope you guys like it! I need some comments and ratings please!
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AlyceR said...
on Sep. 16 2010 at 5:55 pm
AlyceR, Robins, Iowa
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&quot;Im not a slave to a God that doesnt exsist, Im not a slave to a world that doesnt give a shit.&quot;

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I really want to read this whole thing now!!! I absoultly have to!
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Aug. 25 2010 at 12:26 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thanks! I'm not sure if I really have a whole idea, or if I'll even continue it. I'll read your article. Thanks for commenting on mine!   ;)
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Aug. 25 2010 at 12:24 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thanks for the try. Whenever I search for an article, I never find it, just unrelated articles. I don't know why.
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Aug. 25 2010 at 12:23 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thank you. I don't like this piece anymore, I see so much I could improve on. Thanks for an honest judgement.   ;)
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Aug. 25 2010 at 12:22 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thank you! I don't know. Perhaps the boogie man!   ;)
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Aug. 25 2010 at 12:20 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thanks Ellie! I'll try my best!   =)
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on Aug. 25 2010 at 12:20 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thanks! I actually have no idea. Gosh...now that I'm reading it over, I see so much that I can improve on.
B.R.Nack SILVER said...
on Jul. 12 2010 at 9:13 pm
B.R.Nack SILVER, Grand Junction, Colorado
5 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;...Monsters are real, and ghosts are real too. They live inside us, and sometimes, they win.&rdquo;<br /> --Stephen King

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I tried to look at yours but when I did a search nothing came up :(
B.R.Nack SILVER said...
on Jul. 12 2010 at 9:10 pm
B.R.Nack SILVER, Grand Junction, Colorado
5 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;...Monsters are real, and ghosts are real too. They live inside us, and sometimes, they win.&rdquo;<br /> --Stephen King

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Awesome!! Tell me when the rest of the story is done!!! :)

You should read my story, it's called Tonight He Must Die :)

Diana101 GOLD said...
on Jul. 12 2010 at 12:49 pm
Diana101 GOLD, Grove City, Ohio
13 articles 0 photos 107 comments

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&quot;God&#039;s delays are not God&#039;s denials&quot;

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Amazing intro! Can't wait for the story! :)

Check out my story, it's called Murder of Guilt. :)

IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 7:49 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity. <br /> ~Amoniel<br /> <br /> "Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'" <br /> ~Thesilentraven

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Not the best, but an intersting idea. It definately has promise.
MusicIsLife013 SILVER said...
on Jun. 11 2010 at 4:00 pm
MusicIsLife013 SILVER, New York, New York
6 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Light, like the flutter of wings, feel your hollow voice rushing into me<br /> As you&#039;re longing to sing&quot; -AFI<br /> <br /> &quot;Here we go again, I kinda wanna be more than friends, so take it easy on me I&#039;m afraid you&#039;re never satisfied.&quot; -Neon Trees

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holey c*** who is it?? haha. This is a very good intro. If there was more, I'd read it :)
EllieK. BRONZE said...
on Jun. 6 2010 at 3:18 pm
EllieK. BRONZE, Wilmette, Illinois
4 articles 0 photos 74 comments

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&quot;Not all who wander are lost&quot;<br /> JRR Tolkien<br /> <br /> &quot;Sometimes life sucks, so suck it up&quot;<br /> -ME<br /> <br /> &quot;&quot;We succeeded in taking that picture (from deep space), and if you look a it, you see a dot. Thats here. That&#039;s home. Thats us. On it, everyone you ever heard of

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It definitely grabs you in from the beggining. Job well done, I liked it.

Could you check any of my stuff out, Thanks Elliek

HeatherBee BRONZE said...
on May. 17 2010 at 4:43 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1979 comments

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Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper<br /> <br /> Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

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OMG! WHO IS IT???? this is an awesome story!! it pulls u in
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on May. 11 2010 at 3:27 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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I'll try to get some time for your work. Thnx for the comment!   =)
meganleigh122 GOLD said...
on May. 11 2010 at 11:55 am
meganleigh122 GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
13 articles 0 photos 81 comments

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&quot;Life isn&#039;t about waiting for the storm to pass... It&#039;s about learning to dance in the rain.&quot;

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this is really good!!! you gotta continue it!! can you check out some of my stuff?? :)
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on May. 5 2010 at 3:09 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thanks! Um, I might not be publishing it. Sorry, but thanks for the comment!
sunnyhunny PLATINUM said...
on May. 5 2010 at 2:33 pm
sunnyhunny PLATINUM, Litchfield, New Hampshire
22 articles 3 photos 329 comments

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&quot;An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind.&quot;<br /> -Ghandi

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Let me know when you publish this story!  It sounds really good.
_NoAir_ BRONZE said...
on May. 1 2010 at 1:03 pm
_NoAir_ BRONZE, Toronto, Other
4 articles 1 photo 463 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are as many ways to live as there are people in this world. Each one deserves a closer look.<br /> <br /> <br /> &ndash;Golly (Harriet The Spy)

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Thanks, that's really kind of you! I do hope that I get an idea, and I'm sure I will. You've encouraged me alot. Thx!
Meavescrete SILVER said...
on May. 1 2010 at 11:26 am
Meavescrete SILVER, Potomac, Maryland
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It happens, but i'm sure it'll come to you. you did a really great job on this one, and u did all by urself, so yeah the next will come 2 u.