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where was i?

October 28, 2021
By piperw811 PLATINUM, Pittsford, New York
piperw811 PLATINUM, Pittsford, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"chemistry between people is the strangest science of all" - Bridgett Devoue


oh love, i had the most vivid dream–

i miss you, but what can i say?

with my head in the clouds, i didn’t hear you scream.

 

it began slowly, with the fading sunbeam,

then night poured in, and god, was it yesterday?

oh love, i had the most vivid dream–

 

you were there too, or so it would seem,

together we were covered in a mist of grey–

with my head in the clouds, i didn’t hear you scream.

 

with strength and aggression, he was too extreme–

seizing you tightly and ending your “today”…

oh love, i had the most vivid dream–

 

if that river was liquid candy, the mountains were whipped cream,

as i played in the stream, you became his endangered prey–

with my head in the clouds, i didn’t hear you scream.

 

he took you away, left you stranded upstream,

and when i awoke, it felt all too cliché.

oh love, i had the most vivid dream–

with my head in the clouds, i didn’t hear you scream.


The author's comments:

I've been enjoying working with different styles of poetry and writing in general through my creative writing class this year, and this type of poem was particularly challenging. This is a villanelle: lines 1/6/12/18 and lines 3/9/15/19 are the same, while the rhyme scheme follows an a/b/a pattern throughout (with the exception of the last stanza being a/b/a/a). 


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